Hello
everyone The Copycat Kid here, Infinity founder and current COO. Second week of
Infinity has been another huge success and right now your very own King of Character
will be doing his fortnightly feedback on the submitted promos from Infinity #2
which took place on August 19th 2013. Based on the feedback on the
feedback from Infinity #1 I thank everyone for their input and ideas, let’s
hope this edition keeps the standard of the first week.
Also
a big thank you to Roderick Blackmore (Robbo) for producing the new graphics to
the feedback upon my request, I think it livens up the place quite nicely. Now,
shall we get the ball rolling?
If
you want to re-read the promos from Infinity
#1 & Infinity #2 here is the link:
I
think by having a useful promo archive we can keep track of the living story,
and also people’s progress. No doubt that even in a few weeks you will notice
subtle or major improvements in your promo’s this week. We will have PPV Promo
Archives as well, I have one already waiting to be filled for Immortalis, the
first Infinity PPV.
We
got nearly every promo submitted this week, all except from Lucian
Shannon…which was a shame as we would have like to congratulate the entire
roster for a week’s hard work. People redeemed themselves by submitting work
when they last missed last week so to all of you this applies to thank you and
well done!
For
now though let us plot hypothetical revenge against Lucian and hope next week
we can have a one hundred percent victory.
Management
split the matches right down the middle this week, just so you know this is who
write whose match this week. But to make it perfectly clear we read and judge
every promo together so that it removes the possibility of bias.
Michaels
vs. Matt Young vs. Craig Anderson – Blackmore
Starkiss
vs. Jamo – Blackmore
Tierney
vs. Smith – TCK
Team
Over Rated vs. Casanova & Jameson – TCK
Flynn
vs. Muir – TCK
Shannon
vs. Westfall – Blackmore
Rydell
vs. Power – Blackmore
This
week’s promo length was a massive improvement; however some people again fell
short because they gambled with a shorter promo. An A4 page worth of material
can only be match winning material if it truly convinces me why you should win
a match, the secret is that shorter promo’s need to be more relevant and direct
to have any chance of winning.
Here
at Infinity we are not asking for mammoth 6000+ word promos for every show, we
only want for each promo to hit the nail on the head to do well in your match.
Longer promo’s like Adrian Flynn’s work because of the way they are written and
immerse you, so shorter ones need to pack a punch. Well done to everyone
though, another solid week of promo’s.
Infinity
#2 was an improvement in this respect, but some people still refuse to
caps-lock the I’s and use commas, but still grammar is all about impressions,
and the point of writing more is to improve it gradually over the time. Promos
made me aware about how bad my grammar was and how it led to me writing novels
as I felt confident the skills I learned in my promos had improved my written
English quality which is also important for real life jobs. I would remind everyone
about the greatest thing ever invented for any writing software: spellcheck.
The
wrestling language of Walkerian may be a mainstay for the forum, Facebook, and
social media…but inside a promo is sloppy work. Never less an improvement on
this, let’s hope Taylor Westfall checks his spelling ahead of a world title
match.
As
ever the basis of how Infinity management judge promo scripts is based off a
system, if this is your first week in Infinity then let me into how we do it.
Instead of judging peoples work solely based off of one person’s ‘preferences’
which is an awful way of judging promos because they are unpredictable and
quite frankly idiotic, we have a system in place to make the best
choice. Here is how we judge promos, some factors are more important
than others, i.e. relevance to the match being most important, and fun to read
too.
Good Promos:
·
Grabs
the reader’s attention and imagination
·
Direct,
relevant to the match you are in
·
Written
well, with good grammar and fitting writing style for your character
·
Interesting
to read, original, innovative
·
Adds
a new piece of story that improves Infinity City
·
Shows
your knowledge of the Infinity City, whilst also interlinking with its living
story
·
Complements
your character/gimmick, and puts them over
·
Keeps
to your alignment (Heel/Face/Tweener etc.)
·
Dialogue
used well
·
Balanced
in regards to length of promo
Bad Promos:
·
Copied
or heavily plagiarised (cheaters will face consequences)
·
Indirect,
not relevant to the match you are in
·
Poor
use of grammar and chosen writing style for your character
·
Boring
and unoriginal
·
Adds
little or degrades the story of the Infinity City
·
Shows
poor knowledge of the Infinity City, nor does it link to the living story
·
Contradicts
your character/gimmick, doesn’t put them over
·
Does
not keep to your alignment (Heel/Face/Tweener etc.)
·
Dialogue
badly used, large unbroken chucks of solid text
·
Unbalanced
in regards to the length of the promo
You
can check out the Infinity Developmental page here where you can learn how to
build amazing promos, characters, and more! http://www.infinitywrestling.net/#!infinitydevelopmental/c1a4e
Now,
what you have all been waiting for. I will be discussing all seven matches that
took place on Infinity #2. I hope you find this feedback useful for making
improvements in the future. Please try to read all the match comments, being
the King of Character I learnt by reading over peoples feedback and haunted my
opponents strengths and weaknesses, maybe you can learn something too by
reading everyone else’s feedback.
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Jason
Smith vs. Joey Tierney
Singularis
division Tables Match
The
match between Smith and Tierney was one hell of a debut for both participants.
We shall start with Joey’s promo first. I loved the angle that Joey hated the
City, it was a short and sweet rendition which was direct and relevant to the
match, but the promo could have benefited more with the theme of the match
where they would have to sacrifice something if they lost. Considering Joey’s
character as a rock star losing anything in his life would be quite dramatic
and meaningful for him as he is a man who likes possessions, and image.
Joey’s
character has good flair and it didn’t take me long to know what kind of
character he was, one that in the future if I was to copy myself I wouldn’t
have a problem with. Additionally he incorporated the City and kept to his
alignment well, he also had a really good moment where he broke the fourth wall
in a subtle way which made it the moment of his promo. Another great thing
about his promo that Smith lacked was a little humour, I can’t remember why but
he made reference to a dying giraffe which made me laugh when I read his promo.
One thing that really stood Joey apart is why he didn’t want to be involved
with the world championship tournament…how he is above it and hates the city.
Combining all of these factors with no detectable grammar problems and a good
sense of scenery what Joey did well was good reading.
With
that said there are some little chinks in the chain to address. I wanted to
read more of the promo and felt that it could have benefited with additional
length. The match also wasn’t referenced as much as I’d like, and the
Singularis was not even mentioned. Also Nikki was a backdrop I didn’t know much
about, she could have been used to put over Tierney in the right light. I think
as long as there is future character development with the challenges of his
lifestyle and ego which will amount to a face turn that will be good, and branching
out and spending some times on enhancing his promos I am sure Tierney will go
places.
Jason
Smith’s promo had a good sense of realism and real world family issues; it was
a slow and dramatic burn promo that got more intense over time. This highly imagined
promo I imagined perfectly in my head like a movie when I was reading it and it
complimented his character to the core about why Jason was so messed up. In
future promos I would like to see more of that story implemented as he grew up
so we get a better sense about what the child Jason did to end up as the
monster he is now. Personally, I felt more fulfilled with reading his promo and
he added some cool easter eggs about the pamphlets we made to promote Infinity,
the only major downside was the relevance was a bit off-key as Jason really
didn’t address the match but his past.
Things
to look out for Jason Smith in his future promos are as I already said, match
relevance, when a promo is indirect I have granted decisions before where the
other promo was more relevant to the match and it burns because some of the
times the losing promo may be better. Another thing to note ahead the match at
Immortalis is that Jason didn’t talk about sacrifice much, and the point of the
Singularis division…what would Smith sacrifice? Wha would a man sacrifice that
had no remorse? Implementing the theme of sacrifice better will drastically
improve the next promo. Aside from the few grammar mistakes that needs to be
looked over it was a very good and balanced promo in regards to length, but my
advice is to read Murray Muir and Adrian Flynn’s promos so far, they are good
at fusing together story and match relevance.
Two
opposite promo styles, Tierney displayed flair and Smith wrote a piece of
drama, this was a bitch to judge, but we will use the food analogy from last
week. Tierney’s was a bacon roll, sweet, and epic, but not enough of anything
else. Smith’s was the whole baguette but no edge; you look back and think what
am I eating this for? Both had their cliché. Each story had been done before. One
had one thing the other didn’t; which is what made it difficult to judge in the
first place.
We
have to talk about this for more than other matches; over 20 minutes of talk in
trying to decide…it was hard to penalize either of you. We didn’t feel that we
didn’t feel that justice would be served with two people; we would penalize
people for different styles. If we pick Smith we go against our judgement call
of our relevance and we didn’t want to be hypocritical. There was a big plus and
downside to each, we would be wrong on either decision we made, and the draw is
the best reflection of the match and Infinity’s first. We were making very
clear cut decisions last week, and in this instance we favoured different
approaches, I favoured Smith, Robbo picked Tierney, after we deliberated it and
had a huge debate that went on longer that it should be…last week we had the
same issue with the main event and it came to one issue and who made the best
case…in this instance there was no answer, we believe it is a fair judgement
overall and we can’t wait to see what they can do an improve upon for their
match at Immortalis as they both battle for the IWF Singularis Championship.
Adrian
Flynn vs. Murray Muir
IWF
World Tournament Semi-Finals Match
The
world championship tournament really heated up this week as Flynn faced Muir.
Both were deserving of merit after their submissions. I will start with the
match winner Adrian Flynn’s promo.
Once
again Adrian pulled out a superb promo that I was excited to read. His
storyline was a continuation of last week’s promo and written in the same
beautiful book style I adore in Flynn. I love how he uses the real world issues
surrounding a professional wrestler, if you haven’t watched Total Diva’s then
you may not know the hiccups and setbacks that being a professional wrestler
can endure…even sometimes having a relationship broken. I am of course
referring to the Alexis storyline in which Adrian is getting divorced; and her
dialogue is the best of any character in Infinity at the moment, as are all of
his other characters. Jaden’s character was also an improvement on last week,
having his inclusion really sharpens the edges of his promo and it made me
sympathise with Adrian’s character…it will put into focus what it takes to
become a hero. The transitioning of the segments was flawless and not
disjointed in any way, it seems that Adrian is running Adrian Flynn is running
on full steam and only picking up steam, it was a continuation and is high
standard. He matched what he did last week. That is why Adrian is so dangerous
right now.
We
don’t have to go back to the points last week; it’s all about the story, adds
story, shows knowledge, keeps to his alignment and builds his characters. I
could copy and paste it last week, the difference is his story is different and
he has added to it which is high quality material which is massive boost for
him as it shows he is not a fluke and a true competitor here in IWF. Only some
grammar mistakes I could pick out to make this a balanced review, but never
less well done Adrian.
Murray
Muir may have not won the match but he has won the respect of promo writers
everywhere, the loudmouth gang member may not be moving into the finals of the
world title tournament but I will commend him on the promo. Getting beaten by
Adrian right now isn’t to be ashamed of. Muir’s promo was very funny, written
well, and expanded onto the epic story he told last week. The best part of the
promo was his shoot on Adrian Flynn which made the match very relevant and
personal between them. There was less story and more direct action but you
could tell he did his homework on Flynn…including the DDT reference from the
match Adrian had last week. What Muir does better than anyone (maybe tied with
Matt Rydell?) is using stuff from the Infinity City to build his character. The
Joan Adams segment…which was amazing as I pictured it as Adam Jones
throughout…really sold Muir’s character and ambition well. In the future it is
possible that Murray Muir’s promos may be well translated into a book form one
day. His promo was amazing quality as ever with an good style.
Some
grammar mistakes were seen, but they there few and far between. The one thing
that help back Muir is plaguing me…I Couldn’t put finger on it, but it seems to
be missing something, the first part about the death of Barney was good but it
kind of led nowhere because he wanted to vent his pain, and he kind of did it
at the end, I was expecting him to say that there better people dead like
Barney, he needed his cronies near the stage reminding him of the imminent
threat in the gang. Murray needed the threat of his group influence over which
is what made his first promo really good. Having the nightmare in his head of
Barney during the interview would have been amazing I expected it but it didn’t
happen, that would have rounded it up nicely.
At
end of the day because they write similar style promo’s it was down to who had
the better motivation to win, and this time Flynn edged it, but only just.
Matt
Young vs. Chris Michaels vs. Craig Anderson
Singularis
division Triple Threat Ladder Match
The
triple threat match between these three men was a good contest that was won by
Chris Michaels. I shall start with the two people he had been able to defeat in
this week’s Infinity.
I
am big on Matt Young in Infinity; it is clear that he has worked hard in online
wrestling and really stepped it up. That is why it is hard to see him lose two
matches against two of the top guys in the circuit. Matt once again surprised
everyone with his second promo; he had a strong case for beating both of his
opponents…his motivation is solid, direct, and very relevant. His promo was
good at putting across the fact that he has the best state of mind having not
retired from OW, Matt Young says his time is now and he might be right. Robbo
described his work as a “traditional
promo-promo that I use to write” which you don’t see much nowadays where
there is description followed by shoot. I agree, it is a very suitable and
classic style. The first thing you see in his promo which is a nice graphical
touch is his signature photo which sets the tone for his promo. The written
stuff was Very direct and relevant, but could have been expanded on…having the
stip to say that he was going RISE the ladder is a great metaphor to be used in
the future. Descriptive parts were really good; fell short in the shoot, not a
great level of intensity which could have been used to add some much needed
tension to how badly Matt Young wants to reach the next level. Suited to his
character: meant to be level headed and calm and everything, keeps to his
character very well. Moreover I wanted to read more about the description
parts, the plot is simple, and the grabbing of the attention is really good,
not something dramatic or edgy (credit where credit is due his reasons were
rock solid, rollercoaster of description), but the story kind of just ended
with no justice done to it. Also, Matt Young...if you are reading, I want you
to re-read both promos you did and ask yourself which promo had a better case
for the world championship, your first or second? Me and Robbo agree the
second. Other little things that were nice was the use of dialogue, but looking
over your grammar is important as some lines made no sense, and secondly the
length of the promo was good but if you need another part to finish up stories
and further sell yourself we advise you to do just that. We love reading promos
and you have some room to really add to your work in a positive way…ironically
we care nothing for length of a promo but sometimes it is needed to add detail
to parts where it can radically improve one’s work.
“My upcoming match is a contender ship match,
for the IWF Singulars Championship”. Doesn’t need comer, not a bad thing,
just worth noting, try read it aloud before you do anything as it can disrupt
the flow if not proofread. There was some minor grammar, but mostly well
written, really well written. Such a shame this couldn’t have been the promo
for the first week which is where Young failed to win the match because there
is no reference or real case about the Singularis and what Matt could have
sacrificed, him being the one and only could have really made a strong promo a
very strong promo because the title of the belt and his nickname go hand in
hand.
The
final promo was for the man pinned in the match, and one that management have a
lot to say about in a really positive light for the reasons other than the
actual promo. Opening part of Craig’s promo references about Singularis and
value of belt as risk and reward nature and is better than his opponents, from there
he talks about risk and reward, Craig grabs attention in aspect of the match,
above the three others he was making the best call about ‘losing’ something.
Then, it was cut off. The promo had ended because Craig didn’t have the time
and had writers block. Other feds would call Craig a waste of time, but
management here don’t deliberately hinder stars. We have seen Craig compete
before and he has been majorly successful. What Craig Anderson needs is a
revamp, because from where I am looking it is clear the writer does not feel
comfortable with this rendition of Mr C Anderson, so sit back and read some
critical advice to move forward and find your footing. Infinity is about
starting from scratch, we knew some would take some time to settle and that is
why I write this.
You
didn’t need to add the writer’s block bit, for the sake of writing this I’ll
say that it radically reduced his chances of winning because it felt very unprofessional.
Craig is a great asset, it was half a promo and then it was just complete cut
off. We understand with Anderson why. Me and Robbo are here, and we are aware
that you are struggling with character atm. Speaking may help. Having lost a
good thing to lose is your gimmick if you want to start fresh, me and Robbo
speak to everyone who comes to us we ALWAYS help, we love conversation over
it…its refreshing, it builds both stories, and he needs some perspective in his
character…another dimension, the “catch”. Craig has a good basis, but he needs
the IT factor based off what we are reading: needs the first step on the
ladder. Add a few dimensions; it’s the subtle things people play off:
#FuckRydell, JC not being over, Lucian living underground, Hooligan from the
rival city, Jameson being a TV star, me being a copycat, Mack being a movie
star. Craig Anderson can become anything what he wants and when he finds it I
am sure he will want to promo more. Also pay homage to the promo guide and have
a read of it, and the character guide, and the key question here is: are you interested in your character?
Write about something you like. What about if your character plays in the
Infinity FC league or manages a team in his day-to-day job? Incorporate what
you write about. He doesn’t need to spend all the time on it, read what is good
and bad…what can you learn from them? If you want a good sense of story read
Jason Smith/Muir, read Matt Young’s for shoot (also Rydell), he could be a
manager of team he could create or play on it, and he could aid the football
career with his wrestling thing: he could intertwine it and play off angle he
is consequential.
And
lastly the winner of the match, Chris Michaels, who wrote a starkly different
piece in comparison to Young’s promo as it was a story driven with Michaels,
which suites his style. Chris gave a convincing story that he is the man despite his loss to Adrian last
week, and that he will rise up again. Speaking about it without having to
actually come out and say it. The prologue was short and sweet and really set a
positive tone from the get-go, it instantly grabbed my attention and each part
following was different in its own way. Like last week it was a personal piece
and had lots of imagination and thought going into it, unlike his opponents he
fully utilised his background and story to good effect. Chris’s work could be
described as a slow burner but there was lots happening which made it fun to
read, especially the story he fleshes out for Sammy Kinghan who drives to
Michaels house for an interview. The story was so good with Kinghan we are
rolling with that as his actual background. What Chris does best is creating
deep, meaningful characters to support him; most of the time Chris’s character
does not to do any of the heavy lifting which allows you see Chris in a
different and more realistic tone. Another thing I enjoyed was the scenery he
described, another important staple to his promos, I imagined everything
perfectly…and in my own way I imagined a sit down interview with Batman and
Ghost Rider which made me enjoy it even more. Michaels reference to Adrian’s
DDT from last week on the outside of the ring was an amazing easter egg and did
the promo justice. Chris has no superficial BS, he is a real man’s man and
doesn’t hide from who he is, in his promo Kinghan was expecting him to
interview in-character, the real point was is that he was acting in-character
which frustrated Kinghan…he is who he is, and he doesn’t mince his words with
it.
This
was a promo with a very good example of a longer promo that didn’t drag, but I
think it was really good length which was a plus. Chris’s madness is that he
has to work against it, he thinks he shouldn’t be in this match as he shouldn’t
put people over…it isn’t his duty, he plays veteran role very good. Very good
subtlety is good…all of it directed at Anderson and Young, about how the youth
of the industry are arrogant.
In
the future expect Adrian and Chris to step back into the ring together. Chris
is amazing at long-term feuds; we hope that many of the memorable moments
involve the Master of Execution and Adrian Flynn. Until then Michaels is strong
going into his match at Immortalis, and the tag match next week with James
Jameson against Over Rated.
Young,
well done, you are in a championship match next week and if you make these
improvements there is no reason you can’t win the title. Chris did such a good
promo it would be an injustice to the match if he didn’t win, Michaels is a
very strong writer and phenomenal promo writer and Young should be proud of it,
and it’s such a shame that Craig didn’t deliver like we expected him to. But in
respect to all three people it is up for everyone, because Young has shot at
belt, Anderson can improve his character and Michaels goes from strength to
strength on his path to Immortalis.
Starkiss
vs. Jamo
Singularis
division Submission Match
This
was an interesting match, it is rare that you now have gimmick vs. gimmick
matches but in Infinity #2 we had one. In this contest the Grimm Reaper Jamo
went against Starkiss, the kiss-tastic new addition that was formerly Steve
Davids. As usual I will start with man unfortunate enough to have lost the
match.
Starkiss
had his IWF debut this week, and it was an interesting promo to say the least
considering the nature of his gimmick being all about kisses. From the promo I
love the fact he mentions the city of infinite possibilities and the characters
of infinite personalities that Starkiss represents (being a mesh of everything
the handler has done since). Good reference about the match, but then again he
wants something on the line and the submission he and Jamo share. The two
people have sacrificed something before they do their promo’s, and much
different from opening match between Smith & Tierney. I was looking forward
to this as I love gimmick characters, but it was slow burner and shorter than I
expected, this suffers from the Young Syndrome: introduction promos. Nobody
wants to start slow and losing, so I don’t see why people don’t hit the ground
running with a full length promo. Albeit the introduction was good it was not
enough to beat Jamo who put a little extra detail and character into his
effort. However the promo was well written as a whole and the novelty of
Starkiss is a good thing to have on the roster.
Well
written as a whole: Novelty is a good thing; Jamo has an extremely good novelty
to have: good attraction on the roster. Over the course here Starkiss will be
morphed into a very good novelty character, if he had given us more to work
with, Starkiss wouldn’t have fallen flat on his face. Jamo is the master of not
mincing his words as he quite rightfully said he was going to squash you.
Other
things I would like to have seen would be about Starkiss being a mystery yet to
be solves. Furthermore the length of the of the promo could have been used more
effectively to add more detail which would have increased your chances of
beating Jamo. Also a worthy note, Starkiss is the first person to get the name
of the fed wrong! XWF is not IWF, and quite confusing because I and X are quite
literally the opposite side of a QWERTY keyboard.
I
can’t believe I am about to say this, but Starkiss has achieved a gimmick with
the same opportunity as my own. Starkiss can be anyone he wants to be, touché. When
approaching a novelty gimmick you need a list of things your character will do:
take it full measures, for example he should approach people or kiss them on
the cheek, or in the ring do it afterwards. Or draw it on lipstick, or you know
ask for a kiss at the end of an interview. Novelty gimmicks are great as you do
things that others can’t. Don’t be scared to play around with it because
Starkiss will be noticed for his actions.
Ps.
I picked up on your Elijah Fortune gimmick, influenced by yours truly.
For
the second week in a row Jamo has made someone tap out, he is undefeated in
Infinity and next week he teams with Starkiss in Harmony week. But let us take
a look at why the Grimm Reaper picked up his second victory in Infinity. Because
of the no-mess way he writes he has a unique attribute that makes him strong
when it comes to promos. There is a certain entertaining aspect, Jamo promos
are great because he always entertains, and me and Robbo know what we are
expecting in terms of his character, there is a lot of fun in it and people
play up on his mythic status. Jamo never disappoints in his promo’s as he is on
his own pedestal as his character has unique ability to smile when we are
reading it which is important, his promo’s explain why he has a mythical
status…we don’t hear much of Jamo in the Infinity camp but when he turns up it
is always a rollercoaster ride.
For
both of 2.0 it grabbed our interest and imagination, he has a distinct
uniqueness, which he translated perfectly fine. Jamo likes having fun with his
character. It also appears he has obviously read the feedback and taken in
board like a real champ and I appreciate that, and he has shown development,
even if it was a bone throne chair, it’s still development and it suited his
character.
Apart
from hitting the nail on the head with the sacrifice theme he had a good shoot
against Starkiss, despite the grammar, but the novelty of Jamo’s character is
amazing. We were both in stitches reading “using
all the makeup to feel like a girl”. On par with reading with a legible Scott
Steiner. Jamo also called this a squash match, I nearly coughed blood. Jamo has
related it to the stipulation of losing something, and lastly I loved the
sentiment about his reference about the Bebo Wrestling Network, Jamo wanting to
be the saviour of a dying breed, and in retrospect a subtle theme is that death
is crucial to the circle of life.
Like
always some things Jamo needs to improve upon are his grammar, it is important
as you don’t want your reader second guessing what they just read. Never change
the way you talk, just the cleaning up of sentences that make little
grammatical sense.
I
really enjoyed this match this week, and both people if they continue with
future developments can go further and only get better. Also a last message to
Starkiss, and Jamo too, because of the gimmicked characters you both have it
gives you the opportunity to be in unique situations in the City and the show.
Doing things that others refuse to do because of their serious characters is
something both Jamo and Starkiss can take advantage of…and seeing as your
tagging in the next show it can create some really cool situational comedy.
Over
Rated vs. Casanova & Jameson
Harmony
Tag-Team Match
One
of my favourite matches of the night, two teams battled it out in a match where
I was the special guest referee. Team Over Rated defeated the combined effort
of Jordan Casanova and James Jameson, their performance ended in a DQ which
best reflected the outcome of the match. This time we will start with the
winners, John Charismatic & Blair Holmes.
John’s
promo was in good taste for the match, the one thing I didn’t get which I expected
was “Is Harmony Over?” (laughs). John put across his team and the Harmony
division very well, including his story involving the failing Charismatic Coliseum
and its new members. In all honesty I was surprised by his submission, I was
expecting something shorter, but when I read it I was content with his work.
The one thing that made his promo stand out was the additions to the City; this
was the deal breaker with his promo. John has given Infinity its first radio
station and developmental wrestling school and a cast of characters to support.
John
and Blair had a really good interlinking promo, not quite the joint promo of
the future I envision, but in time they will no doubtably get there. Kayfabe
Alert: During the judging my gut instinct told me to bury John Charismatic, he
even thinks his promos are going to go over? Over my dead body will Over Rated
hold tag team gold. I should have sent in Jamo to make this a squash match.
Thank god for Roderick bringing me to my senses and showing me the light.
Blair
Holmes wrote the other solid half of their match winning effort, it was a true
compliment to his work and even included the classic Bebo text coding symbols within
which was a really cool throwback and made his promo very unique to read. His
promo was the shorter of the two but that was not a bad thing, however
additional length and detail could have solidified the victory to full pinfall
status. The setting of the promo added a nice piece of story to the Infinity
City with his nightclub Electric. After
reading both of Over Rated submissions I was comfortable with giving them the
victory as they had both worked hard to show their harmony. They didn’t quite
get to the clean win because their opponents made it tough for them to achieve
it
Jordan
Casanova had another fantastic promo against Over Rated, this time round it was
direct and relevant and written really well with no grammar mistakes. It builds
a firm case why he should be one half of the Harmony Champions with Jameson.
For all that it was worth it was again a very short promo and I was expecting
more, what was there was a good read but this time not enough to clinch a
victory with his partner. Also, I wanted to see more of the punk attitude shine
through that nearly won Jordan the Purity Championship last week; this seemed a
step down from what made his promo great last week. Casanova is all about
rebellion and with Jameson he had a chance to stick it to the Infinity City and
explain why together they had a good team dynamic. Furthermore I wanted to see
more interlinking of their promos, as JBL said a great team always beats great
individuals and in this scenario it was proven true. Moving into Infinity #3 I hope
to see a stronger more outlandish Casanova team with Matt Rydell which should
be one hell of a match.
Finally
in this hectic tag team match is James Jameson. All that I have to say about
his promo was that it resembled last week’s in so many ways. That said it meant
it was a really good promo, short and sweet, the bacon of a hypothetical sandwich.
There was lots of humour and was more direct and relevant than last week’s
promo. Mr Entertainment makes a good case for him and Casanova teaming
together, but I must bring into perspective the JBL theory of great teams
always beat great individuals. I knew what I was getting from a Jameson promo, I
kind of like it, sometimes I wish he surprised me a bit more, I hope he does.
The promo complimented his character and was another good piece but for the
second time he tasted defeat.
Overall
it came down to Over Rated wanting it more, they put in the effort to really
shine as a team and build a strong case for why they should be in the match at
Immortalis for the IWF Harmony Championships. I hope that if Jameson and
Casanova improve and produce a match winning promo in their individual tag
matches at Harmony week then we might be seeing them join Over Rated at the
showcase of immortal champions.
Taylor
Westfall vs. Lucian Shannon
IWF
World Tournament Semi-Finals Match
In
this world championship tournament bout Taylor Westfall is getting the same
treatment as he did last week, to paraphrase myself I said that he got a free
ticket into the next round, and due to a fault not his own he progresses again
in the tournament…this time straight to the finals at Immortalis to face Adrian
Flynn for the coveted world championship.
Lucian
Shannon did not promo, disappointing considering I was actually looking forward
to what the Honey Monster could do with his character this week. Blame Bobby
indeed.
Westfall’s
promo submission was good this week, and considering we all thought Lucian was
going to promo gave Taylor even more reason to hit it out of the ball park like
I have seen him done time and time again during the Bebo days. That said, there
was no home run pitch. Albeit his promo was a drastic improvement from last
week’s one minute promo he did to ensure a victory of Jack Anderson, his promo
if judged against another solid promo may have not been good enough to clinch
him a victory, again, the same story as last week.
What
was good about his promo was that instead of addressing the fourth wall with
Roderick Blackmore’s character (Robbo), Taylor actually used the right
canon…I’d like to think this means the feedback is doing wonders. In his promo
it shows his locality and origin as a Scottish born and raised wrestler, the
scene in the bar really did put across his character better than his first promo
did. A good sense of identity was built for him that I didn’t otherwise know,
and having been out of the game for so many years I only go off what I have in
front of me or anything Infinity related to guide me so in this regard Taylor
did well.
Now,
I don’t know if this is a good or a bad thing, but I’ll be honest…when we were
reading promos I read it in reverse by mistake. Upon correcting myself I found
that the reverse option made so much more sense than the normal way of
interpreting your promo. Leaving Blackmore hanging would have been a much
better way of ending your story as Taylor is meant to be a character that is
difficult when communicating with management.
Moving
onto the not so positive news the main thing I find irritating with the promo
is the grammar, I don’t know if it rebellion but when an I is not in capitals
on its own it leaves a very bad impression as it used so many times in your
promos. The many uses of I can also be a limit to your writing skill, try
mixing it up with more descriptive words that imply it is you, and trust me
every other sentence in your promo begins with the letter I. There were small
technical inconsistencies like not bolding people’s names for speech, and using
number symbols and not the English word for them also need to be looked at but
no major problem. Also I would advise Taylor in the future to really think
about the character he is writing about, especially management, I am more of a
blank slate whereas Roderick is more of a bad-ass management type, and the
overuse of him swearing in your promo is so off key because in canonical terms
Roderick does not swear, me and him never swear in our work. Roderick is very
regal and a professional character, treating him like a boss not like a friend
would have been better. If I was to copy this character, I would struggle. Also
because I only know a fraction of Taylor’s character it would be hard to not
ruin the gimmick before it really picked up and changed as he improves.
For
the sake of saying, Westfall has got a free pass into the world title match,
and considering the best matches so far have been on the other half of the
tournament that he really needs to step it up to be a fighting contender for
the belt at Immortalis, and having known him for a long time and seen his work
before I know he is more than capable of doing it. Play on the underdog angle
in the final, the match was written before the no-show, if we didn’t do that we
would have Lucian no-show through attack and have same angle played we had with
Jack Anderson. Robbo didn’t want to waste the match so we didn’t remove it; we
contemplated doing it but chose not to.
I
have a feeling Taylor may be holding back on something great, and if you
underestimated Lucian’s abilities that is fair, but…knowing my luck he will
going to go into Immortalis and write something amazing, and I hope that is the
case as I want that to be the match it can be.
Matt
Rydell vs. Neal Powers
IWF
Purity Championship Match
The
final match of the show is always exciting as it involved the Purity
Championship, this time Neal Powers got the better of Matt Rydell to be the new
champion. Let’s take a look at Matt Rydell first, the man who is the first man
to win and lose a championship in Infinity Wrestling.
#FuckRydell
kept to a winning formula this time round, the same case as last week. He implemented
all of the City stories and further added to his own story. His promo was an ok
length but both of us believed if he’d had given us about more content/detail the
result may have been better and worth his time in writing the second part of
the #FuckRydell anthology. The second part to his promo was stronger than his
first as he got into it more, and I liked the trivial description of his anger
over little things…the transition between losing on Fifa and facing Neal Powers
was actually really well written. Matt’s shoot on Neal Powers was in line with
his character, he did well to deconstruct his opponent.
When
you judge matches and you think a promo is really good, match winning or not,
it is horrible to pick flaws in a person’s writing as I understand better than
anyone it is a labour of love. #FuckRydell’s promo was good, and I could poke
holes in few grammar mistakes, or the fact he uses number symbols, things like
9 should be written nine. I could talk about all that but I won’t as I didn’t care
for it, what we thought Rydell lost the match for was because he we believed he
was selling himself short of his true potential and that is it. Matt will
bounce back as Michaels did last week, that’s for sure, and I am sure he will
be heading into Immortalis with a renewed sense of purpose. We have a plan for him;
it may even involve whoever may still be the Purity champion…who knows?
Neal
Powers won the Purity Championship, being the first man to take a championship
away from another competitor here in Infinity. In terms of the story he told it
was really good, and mixed with an amazing shoot on #FuckRydell. Neal kept it
relevant and to the point, he talks about the belt and meaning of Purity and
what it brings to the Blood Family. Before I say the next point, know that when
I opened the promo I saw a giant block of text, where it not for the fact I had
to read it I did sigh before doing so, but the promo itself grabbed my
attention and Neal’s words are on fire, quite literally. If anyone wants to
read a good shoot promo then head over to the promo archives and read Neal’s
submission for this week. The block of text was also written well within, and
for its entirety free of grammar mistakes. Personally, I was hooked by the
promo and it was good to see Panik fully utilised when he sent a direct message
to #FuckRydell.
Believe
it or not the segment he had with Rydell in his promo was the first one to be
done inside the Infinity ring. It made me think that the traditional approach
can sometimes be the best as the point was is that he exposed Matt Rydell in
the ring and more importantly he didn’t need to do or say anything with Rydell
that comprised his own character…it was a good old fashioned beat-down.
Traditional is good, as long as it is done well like in this case…Powers has a
strong main event promo. Power’s screams main event, it screams quality.
Main
event or not the hard part of picking holes, because ya’ know it’s my fictional
job as the COO. As already mentioned the solid block of text should be avoided
and broken up unless it is as good quality as last time. Because there was so
little actual dialogue some of it could have been used differently with a
better effect. Also Neal could have better used the stuff created in the City
to compare to #FuckRydell. Neal talked about labelling Rydell as sell-out with
his branded t-shirts and his football team, and his materialistic things that
make him a ‘brand’ personality. I wanted to read so much more about that
beautiful bit of writing. With everything said Neal has the chance to go from strength
to strength, it should be an interesting and hard fought contest at Infinity #3
when he goes against Matt Young.
When
it came down to it, it was the case for the belt again. The Purity is made to
be defended every week, there is risk involved and nobody is safe if your
Purity champion. Both had really good strong cases, Neal Powers worked hard to
really put over the belt and his ability to beat Rydell convincingly. Management
butted heads over the issues and we took a step back and after reading again,
and considering the cases for the championship it was small margin that allowed
Neal Powers to win. Matt Incorporated the City well, he ticked all the boxes we
are looking for, Powers may have not included City stuff but sometimes that may
not matter when his shoot was really strong. It felt like Rydell sold himself
short of the victory, if Rydell gave us a little more content of equal or
greater value he would have still been the Purity Champion still.
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I
am proud to announce that promo of Infinity #2 goes to…Adrian Flynn!
Adrian
submitted another fascinating and match winning performance, Murray should not
feel downhearted with the result as his promo was also an amazing read.
Adrian’s promo talked about the aftermath of Infinity #1 and how it impacted
the most recent show Infinity #2. His compelling story of tragedy amidst his
aim to become the world champion, mixed with his wife leaving him, and his
mounting sacrifices he had to make as he transition into a fully-fledged
professional wrestler really stood out this week. For the second time in a row
Adrian Flynn is awarded my promo of the week. Adrian looks like a favourite
heading into Immortalis to capture the IWF World Championship, his opponent
Taylor Wesftall has a lot of work to do to best Adrian right now who is on the
form of his life.
Condolences
to our runners up who also impressed me with their promos this week, Chris
Michaels put up another amazing promo as he bested Matt Young and Craig Anderson;
Chris now looks strong going into his match for the Singularis Championship at
Immortalis. The debuting Neal Powers also had a really strong promo,
specifically his convincing shoot against the former Purity Champion Matt
Rydell.
I
am proud to announce that Infinity #2’s Match of the Week goes to…Adrian Flynn
vs. Murray Muir!
Because
of the strength of both of the participants promo’s the match of the week goes
to the world tournament semi-finalists Muir and Flynn. A hard fought contest no
doubt, this match had only shaved this victory over the Michaels, Young, and
Anderson triple threat and the main event featuring Matt Rydell and the new
Purity Champion Neal Powers. The match between Murray and Adrian was tense, and
culminated in Adrian resisting the urge to give into Muir’s demands to expose
he is not a hero…after the match Adrian extended his hand and Muir accepted,
but not before spitting in his own. I hope to see another bout between these
two in the near future. Copy That.
There
were some pretty cool things people said in their promo’s this week, and here
are the three I think are worthy of some merit:
Jamo
“Starkiss I read
all your twitters and when I saw it, it made me laugh and prove that you are
not a very good wrestler to face me cause this will be an easy one for me to
make it a squash match.”
Neal Powers
“Normally
though, I am a calm spirited man, it's just some people are fully deserving of
having their ego chopped in half and dragged back down to earth. You Matt, you
deserve that very treatment. For a multitude of reasons. The labelling, the
branding, the fact you wear it like armour.”
Adrian Flynn
“I can’t believe this,” Alexis begins to cry and head for the door, not bothering to stay around and get anything. She turns back slowly, and painfully, you could tell she was hesitant, “I want a divorce Adrian. I am through dealing with this, and with you.”
Again,
excuse the awful Ryback pun, but in all seriousness if you wish to discuss more
about your individual promos or anything else related to anything like your
character or promos do not hesitate to contact Infinity Management. We’ll
always respond to emails, or if you have either of the 2.0 Initiative on
Facebook send us a private message or post in the Infinity group and I’m sure a
conversation will break out.
TCK’s Email:
infinitycopycat@gmail.com
Infinity Email:
wrestlinginfinity@gmail.com
No
way is better than the imitative way.
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