Sunday, 6 October 2013

Infinity #4 Feedback




Hello everyone The Copycat Kid here, Infinity founder and current COO. The fourth week of Infinity has been rolled on by with another huge success and right now I, your King of Character, will be doing the fortnightly feedback on the submitted promos from Infinity #4 broadcast which took place on 23rd September 2013. In what had to be the most amazing Infinity show to date we will take a look back at everyone’s work over the past fortnight.



If you want to re-read the promos from Infinity #1, Infinity #2, Infinity #3, and now Infinity #4 have all been uploaded…here is the link:

I think by having a useful promo archive we can keep track of the living story, and also people’s progress. No doubt that even in a few weeks you will notice subtle or major improvements in your promo’s this week. We will have PPV Promo Archives as well; I have one already waiting to be filled for Immortalis, the first Infinity PPV.



This week we had an 86.6% attendance rate; a massive 20% improvement rate from Infinity #3. Now onto the bit where we name and shame those who did not complete their duties to compete: Jason Smith and Starkiss. We spoke to Jason, who is happy to do Immortalis which will be a tight match for the Singularis title, but from last week we had to cut the smooch time for Starkiss because we discovered he rehashed an older promo that he had done for another federation. In the future we hope that Starkiss can avoid this traceable mistake.

We are thankful that we can speak to as many people about this issue and in turn they come back and compete for the federation as promised. Infinity management are relaxed and as long as we can do anything to help you get a promo in on time we are here, so hit us up whenever a problem arises such as internet problems or hectic lives.

Having said that many of the roster members have kept their pledge and are unflawed in their promo score and I thank with all sincerity of my copycat heart. If you would like to take a look at the current standings of everyone’s cumulative promo score then head over to the Infinity Developmental page where I keep track of the rosters progress in their promos. Here is the link:



Management split the matches each week, this week there was seven matches, just so you know this is who write whose match this week. But to make it perfectly clear we read and judge every promo together so that it removes the possibility of bias. In this show Roderick judged the promos for the match I was in and took feedback from other people into heavy consideration, so thank you to those people who assisted us in making the right call.

The Copycat Kid vs. Adrian Flynn – TCK
Starkiss vs. Jamo – Blackmore
Michaels vs. Muir vs. Charismatic – Blackmore
Neal Powers vs. Craig Anderson – Blackmore
Matt Rydell vs. Taylor Westfall – Blackmore
Jordan Casanova vs. Blair Holmes – TCK
Jason Smith vs. Joey Tierney – TCK



This week’s promo length had improvements; however the main issue is that because people are relying on doing their promos in the last second they second guess what it takes to actually win a match. Word for word from last week I will repeat some key themes about promo length, however some people again fell short because they gambled with a shorter promo, again another word for word. In fact let me refresh you with the same stuff I said last week that applies for this week: “An A4 page worth of material can only be match winning material if it truly convinces me why you should win a match, the secret is that shorter promo’s need to be more relevant and direct to have any chance of winning.”

Here at Infinity we are not asking for mammoth 6000+ word promos for every show, we only want for each promo to hit the nail on the head to do well in your match. Longer promo’s like Adrian Flynn’s work because of the way they are written and immerse you, so shorter ones need to pack a punch. Well done to everyone though, another solid week of promo’s.

This week the best improvements in terms of balancing length and content came in the form of Neal Powers and Craig Anderson in the main event match…two brilliant promos that deserved all the credit they deserved.



Infinity #4 was all round the same in this department because only the tiny mistakes where the things holding them back, but some people still refuse to caps-lock the I’s and use commas, but still grammar is all about impressions, and the point of writing more is to improve it gradually over the time. I’ll repeat again what I said last week to engrain the point of the importance of grammar into promos: “Promos made me aware about how bad my grammar was and how it led to me writing novels as I felt confident the skills I learned in my promos had improved my written English quality which is also important for real life jobs. I would remind everyone about the greatest thing ever invented for any writing software: spellcheck.”

People should be wary of their spelling and grammar ahead of Immortalis, the tiniest of slip ups can look detrimental for the biggest show of the year for Infinity.



As ever the basis of how Infinity management judge promo scripts is based off a system, if this is your first week in Infinity then let me into how we do it. Instead of judging peoples work solely based off of one person’s ‘preferences’ which is an awful way of judging promos because they are unpredictable and quite frankly idiotic, we have a system in place to make the best choice. Here is how we judge promos, some factors are more important than others, i.e. relevance to the match being most important, and fun to read too.

Good Promos:
·         Grabs the reader’s attention and imagination
·         Direct, relevant to the match you are in
·         Written well, with good grammar and fitting writing style for your character
·         Interesting to read, original, innovative
·         Adds a new piece of story that improves Infinity City
·         Shows your knowledge of the Infinity City, whilst also interlinking with its living story
·         Complements your character/gimmick, and puts them over
·         Keeps to your alignment (Heel/Face/Tweener etc.)
·         Dialogue used well
·         Balanced in regards to length of promo

Bad Promos:
·         Copied or heavily plagiarised (cheaters will face consequences)
·         Indirect, not relevant to the match you are in
·         Poor use of grammar and chosen writing style for your character
·         Boring and unoriginal
·         Adds little or degrades the story of the Infinity City
·         Shows poor knowledge of the Infinity City, nor does it link to the living story
·         Contradicts your character/gimmick, doesn’t put them over
·         Does not keep to your alignment (Heel/Face/Tweener etc.)
·         Dialogue badly used, large unbroken chucks of solid text
·         Unbalanced in regards to the length of the promo

You can check out the Infinity Developmental page here where you can learn how to build amazing promos, characters, and more! http://www.infinitywrestling.net/#!infinitydevelopmental/c1a4e

Now, onto the real business. I will be discussing all five matches that took place on Infinity #4, with input from the Chairman himself in many places. I hope you find this feedback useful for making improvements in the future. Please try to read all the match comments, being the King of Character I learnt by reading over peoples feedback and haunted my opponents strengths and weaknesses, maybe you can learn something too by reading everyone else’s feedback too.

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Infinity #4 Quick Recap
·         Neal Powers def. Craig Anderson
·         Adrian Flynn vs. TCK ended in a no contest
·         Murray Muir def. Chris Michaels and John Charismatic
·         Jamo def. Starkiss
·         Joey Tierney def. Starkiss
·         Taylor Westfall def. Matt Rydell
·         Jordan Casanova def. Blair Holmes


This week I am joined by Roderick Blackmore, who provides commentary on my match with Adrian Flynn, and he continues his analysis of Jamo and Joey Tierney’s promos whilst also elaborating on the status of Starkiss.


Adrian Flynn vs. The Copycat Kid
Surprise Singles Match


This match was a special match on the cards, and it involved two real life friends who wanted to face off against one another. I know the man behind Flynn, and he knows me very well, and for many years we have wanted to face off against one another but never could on the Bebo Wrestling circuit. In Infinity we got our wish, and it has spurred on what is surely to be a long running theme and contest between these two wrestlers about the definitions of their characters philosophies over the term hero. Both me and Roderick Blackmore will give feedback, Roderick will give the real feedback, whilst I will still share my thoughts about Flynn’s promo. We ended in a no contest; here is what the 2.0 Initiative had to say about the match.

What I love reading in Adrian’s promos are that his actions have real repercussions for his character, and to his story in the Infinity City. His story is about becoming a wrestler caught up in the whirlwind of real life, and the effects of those two worlds merging and the effects it has on his characters real life. At first glance this may seem cliché but when Adrian writes it as compellingly as he does he does it with a majesty that makes it so much more than real, and believable. He plays his angle like a genius, and there is a reason why he is one of the best writers in Infinity at the moment. In his promo Adrian is failing the school he works at and is a great angle. I liked the story about his degradation of life, how his world was collapsing…and then out of nowhere we throw him into a match against me. The email segment was absolutely gold to read and put into focus his disdain of wrestling at times, he questions the very point of it all.

As ever grammar is used really well and it is easy to read…he had one grammar mistake, he spelled Immortalis wrong during my scene with him in his promo, that was all I could fault him for in his promo with the exception that he should have strengthened his beginning with more punch aimed at Taylor Westfall, his opponent at Immortals, or me, his opponent in this match. Also, I normally don’t like reactionary promos but this is what made his promo so good, he didn’t react to be a douchebag and try get the better of me…he worked with the storyline I had where I wanted to use Alexis Flynn, Adrian’s wife, into telling me Adrian’s weakness whilst I was impersonating him. He fed the best bit of my promo into his and it made it a much more satisfying read that our stories had converged and I got his angle on the entire storyline I had created. That is what Infinity is about; creating a living story together that is alive and breathes cooperation. It was clear to me that when he addressed me that his grasp of the TCK character was very good, and it also allowed Adrian to show some anger as he lashed out against his boss in a uncharacteristically barrage of anti-Flynn heel attitude. In my promo I played the super-villain to Adrian’s hero, and my entrance was beautiful…it is not because I was involved and my ego is swaying towards the promo, but because I legitimately gave off a villainous vibe compared to Adrian’s hero demeanour. I coaxed him out of his principles and code as a villain can only do, Adrian held me up and I forced him to let go before he me…and then in a beautiful scene where Adrian realised he was becoming the villain he had to let TCK go only to be attacked himself, restoring his balance and finally showing the true order of things: TCK was the man who wanted to destroy Adrian’s life, and he was the man who refused to give the villain what he wanted. 

I loved the fact we had interlinking promos, he used my meeting with Alexis to great effect and paid a lot of attention to the way that I talked.  It gave the vibe that this was the villain that Adrian needed to make his promo one of his best. There are people I am in awe about feuding with as I can bring out the best in a character. Murray Muir and Adrian Flynn were top of my list…alongside John Charismatic. These characters in particular are challenged with the ‘what if’ factor, the side of a person that has something to lose, prove, or otherwise a flaw in their personality that I can exploit. I was captivated throughout Adrian’s promo as I realised that we could come back to our story because it never ended, and I am sure Adrian would agree.

In my promo I wanted to put across the many attributes I have seen Infinity, with many copycat easter eggs such as interpreting James Jameson and seeding a part of a feud against Murray Muir by imitating his style at the beginning of my promo. Adrian is one of the few characters that mentally can challenge TCK’s character because the Copycat has never played the role of hero, and it was great writing a story about an anti-hero version of my character, one who believed that Adrian Flynn was the villain because he refused to accept defeat and his hero title was only a mask for claiming the world championship. The best bad guys are those that believe they are doing something for the greater good, the fact that they have too much empathy can really put across a character with a motivation larger than life. Truly, I was Adrian’s kryptonite, and because I prevented him from winning it was a partial success, but also a partial defeat as I did not submit him to defeat. I loved writing my promo against Flynn; it was a long time in wait that I could finally face a person I have mentored on-off for years in different federations, as Destiny, and now TCK. Flynn’s character intrigues me because his story is dynamic and slowly being layered. Flynn really translates that into his writing, and in order to bring out the best and most challenging circumstances for his character I had to amp it up in my promo to represent the villain that believes he is the hero. Safe to say I think we both pulled it off.

I now hand over to Roderick Blackmore who gives his take on the match.


Roderick here, taking the initiative with the specially announced match between TCK and Adrian Flynn. First I’ll talk about the latter wrestler and one of the contenders for the Infinity World Championship at Immortalis. Let me first start off by saying that in no way did I collude with TCK over the result of this match, he very much wanted to win the match on his own merits, and due to fairness (because we’re all adults and all that jazz) and that fact that nobody gave me their opinion I was left to match the sole decision of this wonderful match. Throughout both parts of the feedback I’ll explain why a No Contest was issued, aka a draw on both men’s records.

Adrian came to me and said that he was a little bit downhearted over his result as there was no clear winner and I’d have to say the main reason for me not crediting Adrian with an outright victory was down to how slowly his promo started. Yes, I did read TCK’s first, in fact I was forced to read it the moment he posted it on the Copy Room. Adrian’s promo is a slow burner but I do think it started too slowly. There is an over-abundance of description about Adrian’s everyday life, stuff like brushing his teeth. This style of writing is great and you had no grammar or spelling mistakes and everything was fine, but I’d suggest condensing that stuff down. I know that it sets the scene and builds everything up for the rest of your promo, and it’s great that it depicts Adrian’s life without Alexis very astutely but view the opening page of your promo as a taste for what it too come. Some books don’t sell if the first line isn’t right. By the end of reading your promo I was left saying “wow, this is great, a lot better than the opening”, so on that assertion there is a little inconsistency in your promo, but bear in mind that this was not enough to have you lose a match and real nit-picky. I’m not saying Adrian’s promo is perfect, rarely anything is, and I’m not asking for you to make every opening dramatic but I think that there needed to be something that hooked me, even if it was subtle and clever.

When I was looking at Infinity’s promo guide at the ‘good promos’ section the first bullet point reads “grabs the reader’s attention” and it brings me full circle with my point that as much as I loved your promo, particularly the second half of it, if this was anyone other than me they might have stopped reading, maybe, maybe not. The point being, the story took a while to establish the themes of the match with TCK, it took a while to become relevant with the match.

Criticism aside, I think the greatest asset to Adrian’s style is how he breaks up his promo using dates in bold, meaning he can go forwards or backwards in time and transition very easily. It’s smooth sailing reading an Adrian Flynn promo because he makes it easy for you to read and enjoy. I really liked the incorporation of an email by Roderick and the confrontation with TCK at the end, and though I find the word ‘Kryponite’ a cheesy word because of its overuse in popular culture, it fits in very well with the theme of the promo. Also, as always, I though Alexis’s dialogue was another strong suit even though her role in this promo was less than previous weeks. There is great character development, as always, with the high school students and Jaden and it makes me think that Adrian’s tale would make for a fantastic book in the future.

To wrap Adrian’s feedback up without dragging on if you consider what makes a good promo, Adrian ticks most, if not all of the boxes, he is the ideal Infinity Wrestling star, a modern superhero in a city plagued with casino’s, nightclub and shaded underground and downtown areas of an increasingly unstable and evil city.

If I am to make some suggestions as to how Adrian can improve, it’d simply be to build upon what you already know and try and do what I do every time I have a word document open in front of me: learn new words and phrases and make your writing even more fluid and dynamic than it already is. By doing this a slow start to a promo can be transformed into a wonderful piece. My own writing has transformed ever since I have an online dictionary open at all times, it challenges me to think up of new and interesting ways to get across the point. Perhaps if that was done on this occasion, you may have won, but I wouldn’t get yourself down with a draw because TCK’s promo was really, really good also and because they complement each other so well it’s hard to favour one more than the other.

In line with Adrian’s promo, I think it’s best that I go through what was good with TCK’s promo, his first promo as the Copycat since the good old days of UBW. Then again I think it’s fair to say that the TCK of then is much more different than the one of today’s era. Sam has been able to master what a Copycat in professional wrestling is and has finally nailed down how to make the character great. His promo from the off takes the opening right out of Murray Muir’s playbook and then immediately begins on the assault against Adrian. TCK is one of a few wrestlers who adds in pictures to illustrate his point and does it well when he questions ‘What we see’ in a series of pictures. Luckily for TCK, Henry Cavill actually starred as Superman to make his series of Image Macros (thank me later Dary), it’s a nice touch that doesn’t take away from the quality of his writing.

For me, TCK’s promo isn’t as fluid as Adrian’s promo in terms of writing but the strongest piece of writing between the two came from TCK when he mimicked the Adrian character and went to Alexis. The two had a really good conversation where TCK tried to seek out Adrian’s weaknesses. TCK’s use of the Alexis character is almost perfect: her words are strong and heartfelt and you immediately get a sense of her personality and reasons for divorcing Adrian, essentially TCK has done a fine job recreating another person’s character without them being inherently different. Many TV shows are guilty for changing writing staff and then ruining particular aspects of a character or the series as a whole, take long running series Grey’s Anatomy as an example of this, and to a lesser extent season four of Community (they changed producers). TCK’s promo also shines because of how strong the shoot is against Adrian and the level of writing is at least on par with Adrian, and better in places, but when Sam asked me “give me one good reason why Matt Young should win his match…” (against Purity Champion Neal Powers) I took the same approach and because of the obvious similarities in quality I couldn’t pin point one exact reason why either man should walk away. I’m here to make the hard calls and be the informative eye but in this instance I thought that it’s “best for business” (god I hate that so much), to give it a draw.

The COO is a template for him to copy and to improve, on this occasion I’d suggest that you read your promo through once more because there is some sentence structure that is lacking in parts, little inconsistencies like that matter in my eyes, as a perfectionist in my former life I hate a single mistake, though I smell the irony in these words because there are many mistakes on every Infinity show that I have picked up on, and in my own work. Good Guy Robbo is a grammar Nazi, and I show absolutely no leniency or tolerance for people who write a thousand word promo and do not read it through to spot the one mistake. I’m here to point it out, and on this occasion Sam your promo is slightly disjointed in one or two places because of grammar mistakes, and off the top of my head Adrian is victim to this once in his promo.

I don’t feel the need to over explain myself because my reasons are self-explanatory: Both men fulfill the promo guide quota and give me something extra but I don’t believe one is a stand-out contender. Others may have different views, and if at least one person expressed this with me a different result would have almost definitely occurred, but my judgment call on this epic match was too make both men look strong as a result of their writing and punish neither.

In relation to the finish of the match, I struggled to find one concrete reason why either should have taken a clean pinfall or submission. I slightly leaned towards TCK because of his incorporation of other people’s styles and because he did more of a shoot but Adrian’s story was nearly flawless leading into the match, even though it was slow getting off the ground. Both me and Sam wanted Adrian to win, but we are not going to hand him victory on a plate. I also saw an opportunity to put over Westfall and Muir in the results, which is never a bad thing especially when it’s difficult to make TCK and Flynn look weak, so for a multitude of reasons the best decision was an indecisive result which best sets up a potential rematch in the future.

I proposed the idea that TCK should put Adrian to the test before Immortalis, and in my eyes, there is a clear favorite for the championship at the PPV. The storyline with Taylor and the City thinking that I and TCK want Adrian as champion is almost perfect and has the potential for a true uprising and shock at the PPV. I think if Taylor delivers the goods, which I believe he will give the magnitude of the match, we will have one hell of a match that I will look forward to potentially writing and definitely judging.


Jordan Casanova vs. Blair Holmes
Harmony Division Singles Match


In a match that I was heavily invested in, and personally wrote, it was all on the line for these two men as they went into Infinity #4. Casanova would end up choosing the Harmony Championship over the Purity Championship and his win over Blair Holmes really put into context the tone of what is to come at Immortalis: what is harmony?

We will start with the winner, Casanova himself. A lot of head butting went into this match, with why the winner should be either Holmes or Casanova. What it came down to was the point. Casanova was strong as he had a strong start to his promo when he acknowledged the sour taste of defeat last week. It was clear that he did his homework on Blair Holmes, and implemented it really well with a really strong suit that made me realise why Casanova is such a threat inside the literary circle. What I love about Jordan’s character is that at first glimpse it looks like he is just a thug, but in this he stripped away some of the layers to expose some of his ill-intent and lingering humanity that makes him so sullen a person. Casanova packed a mighty one-shot-kill bullet against Blair Holmes, and usually we wouldn’t accept a shorter promo to be the winner unless we could justify it because nine times out of ten the work of a man who spends more time doing the details and length can win it by being a bit smarter and investing their time into it. When people talk about longer promos they think essays, and Jordan didn’t need it this time round. We do recommend that for Immortalis however he spend a bit more time on his promo as Over Rated are going to be one hell of a contest.
Anyway, Jordan’s work was very relevant and it started well, remained strong, and ended strong. The promo had a punch we were looking for; there was even the shock of him wanting to revoke his IWF contract if he lost. The promo style suits Jordan very well; a shoot style approach does him justice. It grabbed my attention; it’s very direct and relevant…draws upon results of past, his character, his character, and what he needs to do to beat Blair Holmes which he got across better, compliments his character. Short and sweet, really captivating for its length and there was a lot of debate as to who should have won but it came down to who put across the need to win the match more (and its strength), and that was after considering the story, the background, every other factor.

My condolences for Blair Holmes who put in one hell of an effort in one of the tightest matches of the night when he went one on one with Casanova, one of his opponents at Immortalis.  Next up is the face of Over Rated, John Charismatics unwitting partner in crime. Getting straight to the point Blair did something really good I want to share with everyone…harmony. Blair really puts in the point of the larger issue is that TCK is trying to separate Over Rated. He wields the power of the axe dropping overhead to his advantage and has a big time feel promo. There are just a few alternative considerations to consider, things I would have done differently. Jordan’s character would hate me as much as TCK…he could have used Brian Von Malice instead, and it could have made it that Jameson and Jordan are doing TCK’s bidding without themselves knowing…sometimes manipulation is the way to control, they think they are doing it for themselves…however TCK is not intervening or ‘wasting his time on them’.  There were only a few grammar mistakes, but that was only the small print detail nobody wants to hear about. Holmes promo reeked of ways to improve, things like potential to add something new to the City, like a hospital or even a street name where the car crash happened. It’s not the biggest thing in the world, but it would have just been nice…to think about improvement and to get people thinking about his stuff in a contextual manner that would have made the scene more dramatic. I have a very good role in this promo, especially him addressing Blair in the hospital…my character is about being anything he wants to be and Blair put that over really well. Additionally Blair could have got really personal with Casanova, could have taken it a level further about why they are ‘dead men’…he could have fleshed out at the beginning, he sets the scene in the bar, but we didn’t know the relationship with Frank…his death was half-measures if you take a step back. Blair shouldn’t seek solace from Frank personally, and also he needed a couple of sentences about his relationship…like being a long-time friend he gave a job in his nightclub to in order to pick him up.

There was a moment in his promo that I was sitting there not knowing what to think about. Jordan Casanova killed someone. Would Jordan kill someone? We think so. He could have hit on the head about Jordan about him destroying the Infinity City and why he loves to beat up Frank, taking any dirty shot he can. Casanova is a man with no regret in the city, I think he could have sold the angle better by really fleshing out Casanova because he is the Bane, and I’m the Ras Al’ Ghoul in this story, Jordan could added physicality to it that made the dilemma even more him. Furthermore it wouldn’t have hurt if he did more homework against Casanova, stocked up on ammo to shoot against him, bear in mind we are only advising this as when you know your opponent(s) if makes a world of difference in the promo, and it doesn’t take long to do.  What stands out most is what he can do to improve it, and that’s a good thing, because it shows he has the room to grow. We’re really impressed with him and he did one hell of a job, and because we get Blair’s character we can see why he can move forward and the ways he can do that. This was a good read and you can tell by reading his promos he is constantly improving, let’s just hope Charismatic can pick up the ball and run with it on Blair’s team at Immortalis.

Overall I enjoyed this promo a lot; it was one of my favourite reads of the week. Very creative, it is a heist promo. He is willing to have risks because Blair doesn’t have a shoot style, it is based around subtle implications rather than being forceful and blunt with it, he utilises conversation. One factor I believed could have benefited it more is the direction it took, it was very semi-direct, and does it sell his match? Half-measures in places. With Blair you can see has many ideas but sometimes can struggle putting them down to paper…trust me, when I write a book I imagine that I am saying it in my head…it makes things so much more real and vivid and you can sense if someone real or not would say certain things. For Immortalis…the winner of this match that I’ll be personally writing is up in the air at the moment, either team has the potential to take it from the other.

Taylor Westfall vs. Matt Rydell
Singles Match


Taylor returned to in ring action after missing Infinity #3, whilst Matt Rydell aimed to get back onto form by taking out the number one contender for the world championship. Taylor and #FuckRydell had one hell of a fight, which ended in Taylor defeating Matt Rydell…this was however due to Jordan Casanova’s intervention. Taylor went undefeated, Rydell was screwed by Jameson and Casanova.

Matt Rydell said it himself, he didn’t think Taylor was promoing for the show, it’s an easy one to say but #FuckRydell should never rest on his laurels, especially if you go with a short promo. Bit of a rush job (name was history, not much of it). I personally liked the WTF setting; it gave it an old school feeling. There is an epic bit where #FuckRydell says that all of the WTF memorabilia is for Taylor, which is a very nice touch and links into his past nicely. Rydell at least made sure in this short piece that he was at least going to make it relevant, and it was written in the #FuckRydell style we all love and enjoy. The problem for Rydell is that he doesn’t spend enough time doing his promos, we even joke about it when we are chatting on the Infinity page. I don’t need to spend a lot of time on Rydell as he knows his problem, I was just glad to hear the other day he started his Immortalis promo because normally it is done hours before the deadline. #FuckRydell when he puts his mind to it can produce really solid pieces of work, and so that I tick all the boxes with Blackmore, I will also say that Rydell is consistently good with grammar. The written match didn’t need to be long because the promos are short and sweet and the story could be told in a concise manner, the reasoning behind him taking the fall again this week was the same as last weeks. #FuckRydell needed to spend more time on his promo; Taylor took somewhat of an advantage of this. With the right push and motivation Neal Powers might be in for a surprise against the resident #FuckRydell at the PPV.

The number one contender for the world title had a good week in Infinity; he kept his winning streak which puts him up against rival Adrian Flynn going into Immortalis. From the off, I want Taylor to read this as it gives Robbo a heart attack every time he reads it. Grammar. Taylor is a fan of using & instead of ‘and’ / 2 instead of two / pay-per-view instead of Pay per view / lower case i’s again are a common theme. Also Taylor begins his promo in the past tense using words such as ‘aired’, when seeing as it transitions to you it should be in present tense, so you should use ‘airs’. For improvement: What is Taylor feeling? It’s very descriptive, saying what Taylor is doing but not what he is thinking during these moments that matter the most. More holes in the promo, but overall it is better than the previous two promos he did, and he had the opportunity to show us a world class promo because Rydell was a definite to promo, albeit almost certainly late. It’s obvious that he did enough to score the victory, already knowing what #FuckRydell had produced. Rydell edged the story but Westfall gave us a little bit more in terms substance and gave us more of a story, even though it was a simple in ring coming together. Both men had relevant matches, but we are more about the improvement for Immortalis. We hope both of these guys step it up for the pay-per-view, they both need to against the two men on the top of their form in Infinity: Flynn & Powers.

Joey Tierney vs. Jason Smith
Singles Match, Rematch from Infinity #2


Roderick here once more, and Joey I’d first like to say that Smith supposedly got a hold of us on Twitter (though his message didn’t send) that he’d be unavailable for Infinity #4. He was never going to show, and even though you didn’t know it, your task at hand was a lot easier than it needed to be. In your original match with Smith on the second show we thought that your shoot was good and your promo had more relevance, but Smith produced a slightly better story. The promos were polar opposites, and hence the draw and the result of two men going through one table at the same time. Shame we don’t use replay cameras for instant replays, or do we?

Also, use a different phrase here:
“Naturally, I get myself dressed as amazing as I can, which isn't hard when you're Joey Tierney.”

At the very least you should be adding a ‘ly’ at the end of amazing but personally I’d refrain from using the word amazing in this context. Sure, to some degree it puts over your character, but use another word(s): eye catching, glamorous, stylishly, anything that puts across that you’re an egomaniac rock god. The word amazing just doesn’t go down very well in my books because the process of making think you’re amazing doesn’t come from the word itself, but with the meaning of what you’re saying and the tone you’re expressing that in.

Here are some quick examples of how I changed up this first sentence to make it a little bit better.

“Naturally, I get myself dressed as eye catching as I can, which isn't hard when you're Joey Tierney.”

“Naturally, I dress to impress; studded leather jacket, slim fitted formal shirt with the top two buttons undone and an eye catching pair of shades.”

“I dress myself in as much as leather as one man can hope to find, to sparkle in the spotlight like no one else can, and to get into the tightest fitting ribbed jeans as possible, which isn’t hard when you’re Joey Tierney.”

Sentence structure is important. You don’t want people in the real world or even in online wrestling to think you’re a lazy writer. I know you’re not, you’ve been great promoing, but the illusion of not trying can hurt your credibility in any walk of life. I know this isn’t a half-assed promo but there are implications in any line of work if a boss (or in the role of the employer who has been handed this) they may think it’s sloppy, even if it’s one word, and will ask you to change it. But hey, this is an over-analysis, just thought it may be worth bringing it up.

A notable quality with the promo is your inclusion of this line:
Hold up, hold up! "Like a rock and roll star"? I'm sorry, I AM THEE ROCK AND ROLL STAR! Hell, I'm a rock God! Everyone knows that! Pft, blondes...

For this next point, the grammar Nazi in me is coming out, so watch out, this is what you wrote:

Joey Tierney:
These two are going to be easy So are you two heading to the show in two days?

A simple full stop was needed, and I know one was intended and this must have slipped your eye. There was also another mistake I noticed,

“I'm heading to Robert Blackmore's office to demand an explanation!”

Just remember that it’s Robbo out of character, Roderick in character… but you already know that *cue a vintage Del Rio smug look*

Also a big, big, big plus is your city inclusions. The Scene, Evermore River, Brego’s. One way for you to improve is to say something about each, even if it’s just a few words, just to get a sense of the area so the reader can be immersed even further. For example the salty smell outside Brego’s, the idyllic river separating two sides of a divided city with skyscrapers looking out on the poorer estates, and the dried stains of piss on the walls outside of the nightclub. The close of your promo was also really good with the blood stains on the wall and the reference to the City falling, keeping in character with Smith’s persona.

Overall this is a promo that has its flaws and didn’t take very long at all to read. If you just added in a little bit of description to set the scene first, you’ll rise to a whole new level, you’ll be in with a shot at the Singularis title for sure.

Jamo vs. Starkiss
Singles Match, Rematch from Infinity #2


Roderick here again, once more giving my feedback to another Jamo promo, and once again left saying the same thing. I think we all knew Jamo’s promo was a quick job because Starkiss wasn’t going to show and due to Jamo’s later than usual post it’s probably right when I say that Jamo was waiting until the last minute to see if Starkiss was going to show.

I’d like to use this time to clarify what the situation with Starkiss is. By no means is he fired, he is merely suspended for copying an old promo that he once did and pasted for Infinity #3 when he teamed with Jamo against Joey Tierney and Lucian Shannon. If I was unaware of this promo I’d have said it was rather good and interesting but not relevant. I awarded Tierney a victory by technicality, with Jamo also retaining his victory.

Below is the promo that Starkiss (promoing as Steve Davids) copied:

Steve Davids is the character behind the mask, and the suspension is a way to write the masked kiss-blower off of Infinity until he returns, whenever that may be. It’s in no way a negative thing, and it’s not that big of a deal especially since Lucian didn’t show, but we did strip Starkiss of a victory. If and when he chooses to return to an Infinity broadcast, we’ll be there with our arms wide open (cue Creed).

Regarding your promo, Jamo, there is a lot of the same in terms of layout and structure that I mentioned in Infinity #3’s feedback, but if you and everyone noticed I actually copied the majority of your promo into the show and edited it. That’s a good example of how to majorly improve on your end. I think it’s necessary to bring up the points I made from the feedback on Infinity #2 and #3 just so I don’t go onto repeat.

Infinity #2 feedback:

Infinity #3 feedback:

I think I am right in saying that there can definitely by improvements in Jamo’s writing and structure but on the other hand he’s undefeated and knows how to get the job done. He’s also had a bit of luck/fortune, whatever you call it, thrown his way and it’s put him in a really good spot for the PPV. Here’s hoping Jamo takes our advice on board and continues to trail blaze in Infinity.

Craig Anderson vs. Neal Powers
Purity Championship Match


The Infinity main events will always be matches for a championship, which is why the Purity title takes centre stage on most shows because it is defended each and every week. This time Neal Powers went into his third match against Craig Anderson, where he successfully retained his championship. Two more strong shows and Neal Powers will have the chance to become the number one contender for whoever wins the world title at Immortalis. Craig Anderson couldn’t stop the Blood Family’s best and most talented this week. Let us explain why this was match of the night.

The contender, ‘The Exception’ Craig Anderson was returning with all engines go and raring into Infinity #4. I will start by saying the one thing that screamed from Craig’s promo upon his return, and that was his significant improvement since Infinity #2. For the first time in Infinity so far he showed us why he had been a world champion during the Bebo Wrestling Network era, me and Robbo were heavily surprised by the improvement and we knew that after reading both promos the sheer intensity of this one match was going to make it difficult for us to judge, which was a common theme this week. Anderson really, and I mean this, really write his best promo so far in Infinity. His city contributions and story progression have granted him another crack at the belt as the Purity Championship is defended in a triple threat at Immortalis, involving both Powers and Matt Rydell.
This was the promo we had been waiting for from Craig, but it was received with a bitter sting as Neal had once again continued his strong form to retain the belt. Let me go into why Anderson improved so much this week. For one, Jessica Anderson was a crucial character in the promo and used well…so well that she does what most other background characters don’t do and that is support the main character to put them over. Her involvement was key to the promo, and I’d like to think he had read my feedback about her use and accepted it with arms wide open. Another great thing about it was the death of Randal Evans, Craig and Jessica they are standing over his bedside after the tragedy…a great bow of symbolism that the old man behind Craig Anderson is now dead, soon to be forgotten. He and Jessica went to where it started, thinking about the past and how they ended up here. Randy Evans…is dead. So much improvement, I was marking out when I read it. That supported his claim as to why he was a previous champion. Craig was willing to have fun in his promo, and that is good as sometimes a fun promo is always better than an overly serious one if it is played right. Craig took risks, wrote his lines better, and description too, and overall stepped it up. He sold purity really well, and used the characters dialogue well, he used everything well. Anderson spent more time on the match. He did his research and he put Neal’s character over really well.
Lastly, on the plus side he sold Purity really well, much better than Matt Young. I won’t go into the little things that I didn’t like about it, that is because his dramatic improvement is enough for praise, if he keeps to this formula and grows his character he may be able to do what nobody else has done in Infinity and that is take down the Blood Family kingpin at Immortalis.

Having sung the praises of a wonderful promo from Craig Anderson it would seem like he won, but that is where the testament of Neal Powers comes into effect, and why he defeated such a powerful showing from the returning Craig Anderson. Neal has been on quite some form and is at the top end of the power rankings for a reason, taking a seat just below Murray Muir. Where do I begin with one of Infinity’s hottest superstars, I could begin with saying that Neal’s character is very conflicted, and Panik’s character really brings out what it needs to in Neal Powers: the guilt. Powers isn’t proud of his past, he isn’t some kind of monster, but it did help form who he was. Panik was reluctant to hit Neal Powers, and written amazingly, for me it sold a weirdly strong relationship between two people who were born in blood, hypothetically. Neal is also down to earth when it comes to dealing with situations, and the below quote really sold it for me: “Ah, Craig, the Exception. Have you heard some of the stuff he says? Three weeks ago he came to the ring and begged forgiveness from the crowd for his actions and hoped they would support him as he went in search of better pastures. He's a walking pain in the ass, makes a big deal of striving to be different. Any man who proclaims he strives to be different isn't as different he believes he is.”
I also really like his theme of mercy, about how abandoning his family meant they were never truly punished for their crimes. Powers has the ability to persuade the reader that the way he carries himself is believable and authentic for a gimmicked character, which is doesn’t feel like it is the case at all. Powers is showing true main event quality. If he wins this match, he is one step closer to cashing in the Purity title for a shot at the world.
By the way, Robbo loved The Wrestling Machine references, providing they were aimed at him. Those little pieces of detail he adds are fantastically used. Neal pays attention to the detail…he wields it as a sword, like the Brendan Kheller reference about him being ‘second rate’ played an important part of his promo. Also selling the point of Purity was done again with justice, with Neal saying: “The Purity Championship is a symbol that The Blood Family is a unit of something you can believe in, something that won't lead you down the wrong path. We, are bound in blood. We, will do what is right by you. We, will open your eyes. The Blood Family stands as one and fights as one. No one, will get in our way.
Overall a very good promo, good length, captivating, built on his character, and Neal didn’t need the Infinity stuff so much as it had no need for it except the interviewer in his promo.

Craig turned a corner in Infinity, but Neal added so much to who he was. Neal told it through his way, through dialogue. Both of them radically improved. Neal’s was on par. Craig’s was short and sweet, a page shorter but that doesn’t matter. He starts and ends well. They both captivated me, and they worked really well together. When we made the decision we thought that the point was that Craig did enough to earn the match at Immortalis, but not enough to beat such a phenomenal promo. We wanted Craig to not technically lose, so that he had another fair shot at claiming the title. Neal did more than enough to keep the championship, and Craig looked strong without having to have Neal bury him in the ring. So that way both men stayed strong, both men would proceed to Immortalis with it all on the line.

Chris Michaels vs. John Charismatic vs. Murray Muir
Triple Threat Match


Infinity has played host to some incredible matches so far, and this was one of them. Murray Muir bettered the colossal Chris Michaels and John Charismatic in what had to be one of the matches of the night. This match was as a result of three men that wanted to face off against each other which resulted in a friendly triple threat being orchestrated by management. They asked and we delivered.

We will start with Chris Michaels, in which he delivered another masterful promo which really solidified that he isn’t going anywhere anytime soon. This was for me the match that I was in conflict over, and in this circumstance the result will always be bitter felt for the one who made it because it was contested with three beautifully crafted promos. The master of execution delivered again, and if he pulled out another piece as good as this he could win the Singularis Championship. I don’t say that in favouritism, but the form he is on makes him the hot favourite going into the show. The best thing about him has been said four times now. Chris Michaels is a man’s man, he knows how to talk the talk and walk the walk…and he hates managerial rule. Throwing the ripped up script in Roderick’s face is exactly the kind of man he is. The origins story is very sad, and solidifies the real character in Chris, he doesn’t want to talk about the trivial bullshit…also massive hint about sacrifice…what can he give up that means more than family? Everything around Chris is superficial, it is just objects and things, and his heart is in the people he cares about. I could repeat many things about his promo. I loved his promo to bits; I can question the relevancy of his promo however. Then again Chris is the master of subtle themes, the point of his promo was more to the point that he didn’t need to focus on the match to win it. I hope that after Chris reads what I have to say about Murray Muir’s promo it will help give some closure on this highly contested decision, just know that it came down to a reason that me and Robbo both came to, one that we knew was going to have some heads stirring. Chris wrote a fantastic promo, which is why he wasn’t the one pinned as we felt Charismatic fell short in many areas. For me, Chris Michaels walks into Immortalis with everyone in his match quaking in their boots.

John Charismatic, the next man up for trial in the Copy Room. My long-time rival and former trainee suffered another loss this week in Infinity. I could sit here writing this saying everything I didn’t like in his promo, or why he was pinned, but it would make it seem as if I was going out of my way to prove a point…so I won’t. This after all is for fun and John’s promo was really good this week, much better than last week’s effort. If he had this kind of promo last week his team would have won, no doubt about it. On first notice I see that he is trying to make a well adjusted jab at me, I loved it. Sometime in the future I hope that this can culminate in something worthy of a match for the ages between me and him.
For me and Robbo, and I hope he takes no offence, but neither Chris or John could match the standards that Muir set in his promo. Regarding John’s promo it took a while to get into, it’s all well and good and the story of the coliseum was put over really well. Alf’s character is very entertaining, as is the prospect of Chris’s future development. Some parts were arguably unnecessary in the manner than the dialogue and space could have been used to really build something up from the get-go. The tone was very much the current slow burn feud me and John have going at the moment. Yet again, I am the super-villain in Infinity this week. I am everyone’s worst nightmare, I am glad that John knows I am if not the greatest heel of all time, and just my mere presence puts people on edge. There was no initial punch that wanted me to stay hooked however, John’s aggression always peaks my interest and it’s a great shame that sometimes it can come too late. I suppose the build -is a good thing in this regard on the other side of the coin. John needs edge to his promos to work; luckily the second half of his promo provided just that which the first didn’t. This line in particular got me thinking a lot, “Jealous because he can hear the whispers all across the globe of how TCK is outshined by his Brother, how TCK is outshined by his students, how TCK is outshined by everyone in the industry because he has never really been relevant or talented, instead like a parasite he climbs inside someone else and feeds on their success!
John has to be careful here, TCK’s character doesn’t have a brother in the sense of canon in the Infinity City…TCK is a mystery; people should stop associating the real out-of-character me from the character I portray in the City. Roderick Blackmore is nowhere near related to TCK, I understand where John was going with this and I was happy he would stoop to this level to prove a point against me, we didn’t hold it against him we just want people to know the distinction as all. Everything else in this line was fantastic. Also, Destiny and Stevens were brothers. TCK has a loose connection, but unconfirmed, with Destiny, but it will never be known. Having said that, it also does bring up the relevancy to the match, for most of it there is no subtext about it. John could have better utilised his space and have TCK enter earlier, leave earlier, and have the fallout with his crew at the Coliseum. I loved that it was back, the coliseum is one of my favourite locations in Infinity. I would rather have John improve and in a weird ironic sense help mentor him back to the no-mess kind of guy he is, it is only the little things he needs to do and I spend more time on the feedback for people who I can see have lost a few matches because of the quality of their promos. In this case just some refinement is going to take him a long way and prove him a force to be reckoned with at Immortalis as he battles Harding and Casanova for the Harmony Championships.

The winner of the match Murray Muir hit out one scorcher of a promo this week; it complimented his style of writing and really showed his passion for wanting to write in a more professional capacity. By taking a full measures approach to his character he really went all-in this week for his promo. He had some good points about how at the end of the day Michaels and John refuse to accept that they love to hurt people in the ring just like any other wrestler, he was at ease with himself and accepted that he was the bad guy. There was a perceived racist line-and you know what, I will mention it, because in the tone of Murray’s promo it hit the nail on the head perfectly for his character, it wasn’t distasteful, but rather intriguing as to why he said it. Of the reading aspect of things it was the most enjoyable of the three and the reason why it came down to him winning because management were at a standstill in terms of who should win and why. At the end of the judging process it all came down to the most basic principle of online wrestling judging which is what promo did I enjoy the most? This time round it was Murray Muir’s brilliant take on being the bad guy, the real man. I had a perfect image about what he could see, and why he felt it. Murray is a man built up with rage, and he is right: he doesn’t need to have people look up to him; he is a downright angry, violent person who translated perfectly into his promo. Very strong, very enjoyable. I loved Murray’s promo; the best bit about his character is that he doesn’t need to make it complex to work. This promo was great with just him because it was the right setting and the right mood. There were even great references to the City, such as Blair ‘Electric’ nightclub. What gave Muir the edge in terms of enjoyability is that as with Michaels we already know so much about the character and every week we learn more. However, in Murray’s case he is a wildcard and the entertainment of the read was that we got to see inside his head, about new things, and old things, really put his character over in the right light. Murray played it risky with his promo because of this, he took a gamble with his character and it paid dividends in the end. Me and Robbo are certain he has the best writing ability in Infinity, alongside names such as Matt Young and Neal Powers who have truly stepped up their game in recent years…he gets behind the personal sides of things…what makes Murray, Murray Muir? He is a vivid person…he’s got the eyes, easy to identify. Whatever he says is good all the time. Overall we hope that we are all mature enough to see why the decision was made, this match was always going to be hard to call and any one of these three men could win. We thank all of them for participating in it and being patient enough with me long enough so I could explain the reason I gave the win to Murray this week.

Having said that…Murray Muir’s next opponent is a certain Copycat Kid. He may be on form but he goes against a man who analyses his character and promos every week, I am glad Murray gave me the ammunition I will use against him at Immortalis, I really am. Chris Michaels and John Charismatic will be smiling all the way to the end of my match with him. Just for you Murray, just a little tip I was hoping Adrian would pick up, but didn’t, and that is the fact that the Copycat Kid is a mirror into yourself. I am the enlightener, and I show people their true colours, looking forward to Immortalis is an understatement. At Immortalis I become Murray Muir.

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EVERYMAN’S FEEDBACK
This week on Infinity there was a lot of description and story based promos. One thing that takes you to the next level is about the ability to step into the next level of personal motivation. It isn’t just about doing things, it is about why they do things…Adrian and Chris are both very good at the inner-turmoil of a character and the reasons why they do things, it is also why they have come leaps and bounds in Infinity.
He stood in the ring and talked.” Could be much better if the reason why he was there was known, and trust me when you know how your characters and other character tick then it will run you marathons in terms of character development. My character is all about having to adapt to my opponents and I believe that some people need to adopt aspects of that approach. What does going against an opponent mean for a character? After all the wrestling is number one, but everyone knows that that Infinity that is not the case because it is a story about the conflict of an array of different characters bouncing off one another.

Character development is a subject close to my heart for many reasons, and I want to see people really just even think about what is it actually like in the shoes of a character. Looking on the outside can sometimes be a bad thing; you need to think in their head. Again, Chris Michaels really hits the nail on the head in this regard, Murray Muir too. Immortalis is just around the corner and I know that people are going to try their best to put across their characters in an bit time context, which is what we want. If you are reading, I hope that you take a few minutes to challenge your character with some what if questions…what if I was defeated? What if I won? What if I didn’t get the pin in a tag match? What if someone interferes in my match? What if I become the contender? What if my rival gets the better of me? After you ask some of these questions the answers should help put your character into focus about their aims and ambitions, everyone should ask themselves what they want to come out of Immortalis with…not just a victory, because that is already apparent.

Good luck to the entire of Infinity for the upcoming Immortalis, I will see you all very soon, and for Murray Muir my opponent at Immortalis I hoped he watched my match with Adrian closely this week because I plan on going all-in against him.

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I am proud to announce that promo of Infinity #4 goes to…Murray Muir!


Murray Muir becomes the second man in Infinity history to win this award twice in a row, alongside past winner of weeks one and two Adrian Flynn. Murray’s win over both Charismatic and Micheal’s was another testament to his progress in the Infinity City, and out of all the promos was the most enjoyable and entertaining to read. Going into Immortalis against me he is looking strong, and it appears I may have to step up my own game.

Consolations again to Chris Michaels who comes in second place for his piece in the triple threat, and also to John Charismatic. Also recognition goes to both wrestlers in the Purity Championship main event, and also to Joey Tierney who despite writing against no opponent did so with a thunderous and rock n’ roll impact. Thank you to everyone who did a promo this week, it really raised the bar on every week since. Let’s hope Immortalis is going to be the same story in this respect.



I am proud to announce that Infinity #4’s Match of the Week goes to…Neal Powers vs. Craig Anderson!


For the first time in Infinity history match of the night is awarded to the match involving the Purity Championship. The reason this won match of the night was how both men had significant improvements and really battled it out for Infinity City’s favourite title. Craig stepped it up and showed us why he is such a formidable opponent, whilst Neal kept true to his current form. We couldn’t have asked for a better match. Coming up in a close second was the triple threat involving Michaels, Charismatic, and Muir. TCK vs. Flynn was not involved in this decision for obvious reasons, but it was well received by the roster.



Here are some of the things that people had said during their promos for Infinity #4 that deserve some special recognition.

Jordan Casanova
“And as for what I have to gain? Besides the Harmony Championship? How about my life back? Times are hard. Being a Champion means bringing home a better paycheck. I can't afford to lose. Literally.”

Neal Powers
“Why do they hate me? Because hate is conveniently fueled by fear and fear is a much easier emotion than courage. 

Neal Powers
“The night I took the hot poker from the fire, turned and struck my father down. Seeing what I had done though, I ran, not for my bedroom, but for the front door. 

Murray Muir
“I can’t inspire people because I know that inspiration is a myth, I can’t give people hope because I know all too fucking well that hope is a lie! In this life, or any life! All there is to look forward to is pain, hurt, and death.”




For the third time excuse the awful Ryback pun, but in all seriousness if you wish to discuss more about your individual promos or anything else related to anything like your character or promos do not hesitate to contact Infinity Management. We’ll always respond to emails, or if you have either of the 2.0 Initiative on Facebook send us a private message or post in the Infinity group and I’m sure a conversation will break out.

TCK’s Email: infinitycopycat@gmail.com
Infinity Email: wrestlinginfinity@gmail.com




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